Thursday, March 17, 2011

Currency

Mine's a dream of circle-value
 Net 0 creates no-
        thing without our
    investment
 to which we reply
"all of it"


I have in my notebook "if you please" as part of the last line but I'm not sure about it. Thoughts anyone?

2 comments:

  1. "if you please" could fit fine in context, I think. It's addition would also make the visual shape of the poem more symmetrical.

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  2. yeah, i didn't even pay attention to that aspect. Thanks!

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